crime storyy (1 Viewer)

[Z_Nizzle]

go on....have u posted it somewhere??

we can all give positive criticism.

 

[Twiggyy]

Hey guys i just wrote up a crime story that has a few conventions in it... and I was wondering if anyone could look over it and tell me how i can improve it?
It would be very grateful so if anybody is interested plz reply and ill try send it to you guys.
Cheers.

 

[Twiggyy]

to z_nizzle

hey z_nizzle i sent it to your profile! thanx for offering its much appreciated!