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[stevennnm]

I'll Bleed It All Away

I know I said I'll leave the blade
and learn to deal a different way.
But I still cant calm my sorrow
unless i bleed it all away.

I had to put away my knife
and let my wounds turn into scars
I tried to find my own way out
on a night that had no stars.

I tried to fight this all alone
to let all my old scars fade.
But i find myself once more
picking up this rusted blade.

I'm sorry that i let you down
that to your face i lied.
But i just cant bear the pain
its tearing me apart inside.

Here I sit, blood dripping down,
my weakened hands still write.
Tears wash away the crimson ink
as the pain i try to fight.

I cant stop saying that I'm sorry,
sorry if you're hurting too.
I just don't want to deal with things,
every thing I'm going through.

Tired of hearing all these lies
that keep shredding up my heart.
I cant choose between the things
that have torn my soul apart.

I cant keep hiding from the truth
cant keep hiding behind these eyes
these eyes that mimic happiness
that not even I can recognize.

I cant figure out the reasons,
theres not much here to explain.
No matter how much i hate this blade
it seems to ease my inner pain.

Everything they all have done
the pain i live inside each day.
theres nothing else that i can do
I'll just bleed it all away.

what ideas can you give me on its concept of inner journey and techniques used to achieve this??

 

[RubiX]

That is a mad poem for inner journey! Do u know who wrote it?

 

[Illidan]

if you want something similar, use the song "jim's Theme" by Johnny Rzenznik on the treasure planet cd, or read "The Ivory Trail" (the one in the stimulus booklet)

 

[Illidan]

ok. what does it tell u and how?

Inner journeys may have an ending resulting in self sacrifice.
shown by person's disison to let go.

Inner journey involve personal obsticles
"I tried to find my own way out
on a night that had no stars" use of imagery, impending darkness of the situation. suggestion of blackness, or persons's emotions,

Inner journeys involve emotions and a need for rationality
personna of the poem, sad, need to explain why
"I just don't want to deal with things,
every thing I'm going through."
"I cant keep hiding from the truth"

Other techniques, use or rhyme, use or rhthym, ie 7 syables in eatch line, add to the personna of the peoim. raltionalising,

Note repetiton of "I can't" What influence does this have on the peom?creates a feeling or the emmensness of the persons situation, causes the reason to identify with the character, because eveyone has said 'i can't' at some stage.

does that help?

 

[Shivorken]

This is such a good poem for Inner journey ... though i can't help thinkin that an emo wrote this =P

Whos the composer? and when did he/she write it?