compared to my answers
i wud give you 15+
i focused too much on reconcilliation and cudn't write bout human rights but i talked about UN and declaration of human rights and the boat ppl i see everyday on the news how they still don't gotta home
yes i know it sounds pathetic
IT IS NOT PATHETIC!
It is still completely right. Reconciliation can still be considered and it is great you have talked about the UN and the declaration of human rights which many probably wouldnt have. The boat people (australias treatment of refugees) would probably be considered the best answer! and what the markers are looking for. It is an issue while is also current so is GREAT!
I think you have done fine and dont need to worry and should turn the blue sad face at the end of your sentence into a