Help with Creative (1 Viewer)

[jeffwu95]

I really need tips on creative writing haha, i have gotten 10/15 for trials and half yrlies for creative writing :S
The comment on mine was that my imagery was not great and it seemed two dimensional

I just cant seem to improve my imagery :S help appreciated

 

[mraznboy]

add a 3rd dimension

 

[jeffwu95]

How exactly would one do that

 

[mraznboy]

add the z plane

 

[jeffwu95]

can a mod like ban this guy :L

 

[plasticities]

It sounds like you have problems with the writing itself as opposed to the story. Have you tried the 'show don't tell' method? Pretty much instead of just stating things how they happen, throw in as many techniques and descriptive terms as you can so that the reader can really emerge themselves in the story (adding a third dimension). I did it mainly by describing things in terms of senses, so instead of just saying, the character did this, said that and went over there. Talk about the things they smell, the sounds in the environment, if only just for the introduction, so that you can really set the scene. Oh and to add the two dimension part, avoid cliche similes and metaphors, because that might make your story just sound contrived and unoriginal.

 

[jeffwu95]

yea ive been trying to do this, but i pretty much cant form descriptive sentences that dont sound over cliche, like i cant form original sentences

 

[plasticities]

yea ive been trying to do this, but i pretty much cant form descriptive sentences that dont sound over cliche, like i cant form original sentences

Just out of curiosity, what was your story about? I can kind of empathise since I struggled with creative pieces the most, but the only advice I can give is to place your story somewhere that you can write descriptively and then (as lame as it sounds) imagine yourself as the character. Like for the one I wrote, I set it in a typical office workplace and a third of the story was me just describing how dull the place was by talking about random shit like the layout of the cubicles and sound of the printing machine.

 

[jeffwu95]

haha im writing about going to a small village in china and belonging at first cuz its like different haha but then the poverty makes me not belong haha and i continue to refer to sydney rather shitly

 

[zeebobDD]

add the z plane

lol'd

 

[RishBonjour]

haha im writing about going to a small village in china and belonging at first cuz its like different haha but then the poverty makes me not belong haha and i continue to refer to sydney rather shitly

sounds good!

I hate creative, hence my aim for english is also 85

 

[onytae]

I've seen what getting jizzed on by a group of people does to a man, it is not pretty. I wasn't a part of it but when I was 12 or 13 I went to a sleep away summer camp and this is like when we were starting to discover porn and jacking off. Some kid brought some playboys and naked playing cards, sh*t like that with him. Anyway, one kid in our cabin was a huge tool, stole stuff like food and money from other people in our cabin. So half a dozen kids decided one night to wake up in the middle of the night at like 3 a.m and take turns jacking off in the bathroom, running out before they finished and blowing their load on the kid when he was sleeping. Literally 6-8 kids did this, all over his face, sheets, upper body, and hands, one kid also did it in his shoes. So everyone else wakes up the next morning and we all knew what had happened but this kid couldn't figure out why he was all sticky for like 15 minutes until a counselor forced it out of a kid. When the kid found out he went absolutely nuts, like certifiably crazy mental breakdown. He had to leave the camp for psychiatric treatment, worst part was after he took a shower and went to leave he stepped in the jizz shoes and also like 6 of my friends I never saw again because they got kicked out.

 

[jeffwu95]

I've seen what getting jizzed on by a group of people does to a man, it is not pretty. I wasn't a part of it but when I was 12 or 13 I went to a sleep away summer camp and this is like when we were starting to discover porn and jacking off. Some kid brought some playboys and naked playing cards, sh*t like that with him. Anyway, one kid in our cabin was a huge tool, stole stuff like food and money from other people in our cabin. So half a dozen kids decided one night to wake up in the middle of the night at like 3 a.m and take turns jacking off in the bathroom, running out before they finished and blowing their load on the kid when he was sleeping. Literally 6-8 kids did this, all over his face, sheets, upper body, and hands, one kid also did it in his shoes. So everyone else wakes up the next morning and we all knew what had happened but this kid couldn't figure out why he was all sticky for like 15 minutes until a counselor forced it out of a kid. When the kid found out he went absolutely nuts, like certifiably crazy mental breakdown. He had to leave the camp for psychiatric treatment, worst part was after he took a shower and went to leave he stepped in the jizz shoes and also like 6 of my friends I never saw again because they got kicked out.

oh jeez thats gross