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[Spiritual Being]

Hey what do u guys think of a story like this?
siberian grown son of high profile KGB agent, gets news of his fathers death, picks up grocery's upon mothers request, drops them at home, admires picture of gf to be wife, then goes to dad's funeral, mum tells him to join KGB in father's place, he has alternative agenda, wants to escape moscow immediately. He says I c u at home mum, goes towards mercedes benz and meets his mint-flavoured-cigarette-smoking-bestfriend, who asks if he still wants to carry out his plan, he says yes, friend asks about main characters gf and if she knows, he says no and gets angry friend is asking so many questions, pushes friend away and drives off to airport. At airport is chillaxing in first class lounge, sees hot girl at cafe. Approaches her from behind, curious if it is who he thinks it is, a silver glint from her coat indicates a gun, main character shit scared who this gun wielding babe is, she turns around, his heart stops. ITS THE GF!

lol thats my story summed up.

20/15

 

[Menomaths]

Hey what do u guys think of a story like this?
siberian grown son of high profile KGB agent, gets news of his fathers death, picks up grocery's upon mothers request, drops them at home, admires picture of gf to be wife, then goes to dad's funeral, mum tells him to join KGB in father's place, he has alternative agenda, wants to escape moscow immediately. He says I c u at home mum, goes towards mercedes benz and meets his mint-flavoured-cigarette-smoking-bestfriend, who asks if he still wants to carry out his plan, he says yes, friend asks about main characters gf and if she knows, he says no and gets angry friend is asking so many questions, pushes friend away and drives off to airport. At airport is chillaxing in first class lounge, sees hot girl at cafe. Approaches her from behind, curious if it is who he thinks it is, a silver glint from her coat indicates a gun, main character shit scared who this gun wielding babe is, she turns around, his heart stops. ITS THE GF!

lol thats my story summed up.

tl;dr

 

[Amaranth_]

Hey what do u guys think of a story like this?
siberian grown son of high profile KGB agent, gets news of his fathers death, picks up grocery's upon mothers request, drops them at home, admires picture of gf to be wife, then goes to dad's funeral, mum tells him to join KGB in father's place, he has alternative agenda, wants to escape moscow immediately. He says I c u at home mum, goes towards mercedes benz and meets his mint-flavoured-cigarette-smoking-bestfriend, who asks if he still wants to carry out his plan, he says yes, friend asks about main characters gf and if she knows, he says no and gets angry friend is asking so many questions, pushes friend away and drives off to airport. At airport is chillaxing in first class lounge, sees hot girl at cafe. Approaches her from behind, curious if it is who he thinks it is, a silver glint from her coat indicates a gun, main character shit scared who this gun wielding babe is, she turns around, his heart stops. ITS THE GF!

lol thats my story summed up.

I especially liked the bit where you summed it up

 

[Spiritual Being]

my creative story:

youra essay is shite, my teacher sayed. i go on boarding of study and sea every1 saying fuck u omed. i cry with streetboy. i donot belonging.

 

[hayabusaboston]

GAWD can sum1 pls giv sum construktiv critcsm?

I chose the image of the girl and grocery bags, and how well does this kind of story fit in with question? was it something about rejection of a place to belong? cant remember. I tried my best to incorporate as much as I could, of conflicting notions of belonging.

 

[loversinjapan]

My creative is about a young boy from a rural town who falls in love with a double bass and plays at the Opera House.

 

[sammiiclaire]

What the hell was the poem!! i did not understand that what so ever -_-

 

[Spiritual Being]

My creative is about a young boy from a rural town who falls in love with a double bass and plays at the Opera House.

do you believe in love at first sight

 

[Makematics]

Nek minnet BoSers quoted by SMH.
Overall went alright, didn't write much again (slow writer) but improved heaps from trials imo.
Did anyone else notice they didn't mention the word belonging in S1?

 

[loversinjapan]

do you believe in love at first sight

No

 

[Makematics]

My creative is about a young boy from a rural town who falls in love with a double bass and plays at the Opera House.

I cried my eyes out, inspirational, 3tc.

 

[hayabusaboston]

Fuak fine den

Sah I saw sum BoSérs quoted on SMH


What does one do, that is so attractive to SMH?

 

[Amaranth_]

GAWD can sum1 pls giv sum construktiv critcsm?

I chose the image of the girl and grocery bags, and how well does this kind of story fit in with question? was it something about rejection of a place to belong? cant remember. I tried my best to incorporate as much as I could, of conflicting notions of belonging.

But...belonging is done. Forever.

 

[Spiritual Being]

But...belonging is done. Forever.

he's repeating hehe

 

[hayabusaboston]

But...belonging is done. Forever.

Yur rite. Wow. Fuck.

FOREVER.....

 

[hayabusaboston]

he's repeating hehe

Fak u, never. Even if I got 70 ATAR, would not repeat/10.

 

[YouKnowWho]

No offense, but how do you run out of time in this exam. There are clocks or people you can ask the time from. There are three sections. 40 minutes each. You've already done a trial. How does one simply leave a creative out or leave all the short answers?!
Did you not listen to your teachers?

Short answer > Essay > Creative. You can fudge the end of a creative, but not lose those crucial marks in shortans + essay.

Oh well, too late

I didn't even look at the time once <> Oh well, it is indeed too late.

 

[Spiritual Being]

all of you guys viewing this thread will keep worrying until modules

do shit in modules

come here and complain

do shit in the rest of the HSC

come here and complain

get a shit ATAR

come here and complain

get rejected by tafe

come here and complain

centerlink payment isn't enough

come here and complain

 

[ForOneEon]

GAWD can sum1 pls giv sum construktiv critcsm?

I chose the image of the girl and grocery bags, and how well does this kind of story fit in with question? was it something about rejection of a place to belong? cant remember. I tried my best to incorporate as much as I could, of conflicting notions of belonging.

Please. Stop. With. Mixing. Numbers. With. Words.
If you can, also try to avoid slicing off vowels here and there. It's painful to read, even if it's an online forum. Contractions are fine in moderation, but try to limit their use.

As for your choice of stimulus, I didn't do the exam, so I can only give an overview.
- If you mixed in clean, concise ideas of belonging and concepts related to it, you should be able to do well.
- If you made references to the stimulus, you're gold.
- If you made a COHESIVE story which flows as the marker skims over it, you should be diamond or stardust, whichever is fancier.

 

[Absolutezero]

all of you guys viewing this thread will keep worrying until modules

do shit in modules

come here and complain

do shit in the rest of the HSC

come here and complain

get a shit ATAR

come here and complain

get rejected by tafe

come here and complain

centerlink payment isn't enough

come here and complain

That's pretty much what the internet was made for. Living the dream.