I know you didn't get what you wanted or expected but just try and move on (I know its hard- I hate it when I under perform in tests). Just try and rape the next test and seize your rightful rank.
it's way too long. a couple of spelling errors e.g diagetic should be diegetic. conclusion is v. good. i'm no expert, but this looks fine. lemme know what mark you get. if you want, i can send you mine on area of study: change.