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what if i dont have my Psdw at least from my experience it’s fine if you don’t drink, just say you’re deso or smth
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what if i dont have my Psdw at least from my experience it’s fine if you don’t drink, just say you’re deso or smth
get them thenwhat if i dont have my Ps
or just sleep at homeget them then
or just go to an after party with chill people who won’t pressure you
i have ss lol(i alr forgot what it looked like)
I did it on the weekend, was funjump off the harbour.
after the marathon?I did it on the weekend, was fun
yeah to cool offafter the marathon?
Tysmmmsorry I got home just now I'll look through it
again as stated above, much better thesis but it can be simplified as I do get convoluted vibes from it, especially the revealing bit - probably shorten it by saying '...insights on the decaying Modernist world -> revealing the devastating impact of deteriorating spirituality on individual perceptions of purpose' or smth.
right off the bat your intro is way too long, it shouldn't be more than ~120 words and a quick copy paste into a word counter shows it's close to 200. again, this is more of a convoluted intro problem which can be resolved by simplifying a few things. first off, combine the ideas of your first two sentences. since u need to address the q you might need to remove the reveal thing and frame your thesis around the q (ie. Comparing the changes in style and form in Eliot's poetry reveals valuable insights on_____). The following sentence should say smth like introducing the texts, then after that a link.
you are putting way too much in introducing the text, which contributes to your word count. Your intro should be brief and concise, you can lose marks for having a too long and convoluted intro as the marker can get lost in trying to understand what you are saying. you do not need to introduce any context or background when introducing your texts (eg. Post-WWI depression) unless it's explicitly stated; in your case I'd say just introduce the ideas and expand on the wider context in your paragraphs. Your second sentence should discuss this transformation - one poem has this idea, while this one has this, then that one has that. stick solely to the barebones idea in ur thesis. when u say they present stark differences on spirituality, u don't need that - it's implied in the thesis, all u need to do is identify and express the differences. and with the deep existential qs - what deep existential qs, don't be super super vague
also this might be a me problem cos idk eliot that well but is it fine for u to only do two poems?? if ur framing ur arguments around one poem each I'd do three (though i'd go for a wider range of poems - maybe 2 per para - to frame your arguments around a proper idea, and thus you understand textual integrity, in that you understand these poems arent just isolated examples but work together to create meaning)
I'm on phone rn so I might not have caught everything, if u need clarification feel free to lmk
just go lmaobut everyone's drinking and idk, not my scene but idk if ill regret not going yk
same I was expecting to feel something but it’s just kinda not that crazyim graduating tmr idk how to feel
i thought that too but nothing happened. it hasnt even hit me yet idk.just took my last after school nap evergrad tmrwwww guys i think im gonna cry during the ceremony tmrw
i think theres a 90% chance ill cry i feel like im a pretty sentimental person and also my year advisor said they were definitely cry during their speech tmrw, which increases the chances of me crying tooi thought that too but nothing happened. it hasnt even hit me yet idk.
its coz u have no emotionsi thought that too but nothing happened. it hasnt even hit me yet idk.