Another English past comprehension paper (James ruse) (1 Viewer)

[jinglebells1464646]

Hi Everyone,
Would someone please kindly supply some criticism for this following past paper? I did one for abbot sleigh recently and there was some constructive feedback for that one too if people want to check it out so maybe this thread might help as well.

 

[pulved]

I feel like you haven't done enough writing for the first 3 mark question. When you compare it to the amount of evidence and info for your 4 marker it doesn't really make sense.

 

[eeeunicec]

Yeah for the first question, either you include another evidence or you talk about your two evidence separately to build a progressive argument rather than being like here's the evidence and they both do the same thing.

Same thing for the second question. Talk about your evidences separately to build a progressive argument. e.g. This is achieved in the image of ... in "everything forgotten" [analysis]. This is further established through the symbolism .... [analysis].

That way you can be more detailed in your answer and guarantee full marks.