Belonging Creative Writing (1 Viewer)

[Viru10]

Hey guys,

I have an english advanced assessment coming up in a few weeks time, and one of the sections is an 800 word belonging creative writing piece suited for a stimulus (which we've already gotten). The main aspects about belonging conveyed in the stimulus are basically belonging to place, traditions and group of people.

Anyway, i wrote this story and i was wondering if anyone can look over it and give me some feedback, particularly focussing on whether i have expressed those aspects of belonging from the stimulus without bashing the reader over the head

Let me know if you wanna have a look, ill PM it to you.

Thanks!

 

[TABATHA]

Yeah ill have a look at it

 

[lychnobity]

I'll look.. and I'm done with HSC already, so I won't leech off it... I'm purely bored.

 

[raniaaa]

i'll look
even though i swore i wouldn't use the word 'belonging' for a couple of months

 

[LILLIAN123]

i'll have alook aswell

 

[lychnobity]

Yeah ill have a look at it

i'll have alook aswell

i'll look at and i promise i won't steal ur ideas

... not trustworthy

 

[xLilith]

On the topic on trustworthiness.

let m 2 c it plz?!
im legit.
promise

 

[super.muppy]

send it and i'll find some honest feedback for you (no strings)