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I'm not sure how to structure the introduction.
>thesis ?????
>introduce two texts?
>outline how the texts prove the thesis?? <<<<< how would i do this and do I need to do this??
Like if the question was
"what do the films x and y tell us about love?
I'd say
>love is difficult
> id introduce both the texts right?
>??? and then what do I do in the third sentence.

and then how would I structure the body paragraphs??
like would i alternate between each text in the same paragraph and then in the concluding sentence of that paragraph somehow integrate the ideas??

thanks !
 

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What I did was
Thesis > Introduce texts > 5-10 words about each text > just conclude the intro (possibly by introducing themes if you haven't already done so)

E.g. This is one of my prelim essays (so not not 100% perfected but still an ok example)

It is only after one comes to accept the ramifications of individual experiences that will allow them to experience growth or change in their transition into new phases of life. -introduce texts- are examples of texts that engage with themes of fear and relationships which exemplify the roles these themes play in implanting a change in attitudes and beliefs in both the characters and responders.

Another example: (For advanced english at my school, we basically did the hsc standard english course)
It is through the various functions of distinctive voices in texts that allow composers communicate their own authorial voice through people and their experiences. Georg Bernard Shaw’s 1914 play, Pygmalion and the 1996 novel Push by Sapphire advocate distinctive voices that reflect comparable experiences for similar and contrasting purposes. Shaw for the purpose of exploring oppression experienced by individuals and Sapphire illustrating how transformation can affect a voice through experiences. The struggles reveal how although texts may explore similar themes of societal conflicts do so for varying purposes.

How I did my body was
Core: 60 Related: 40 or Core: 50 Related: 25 Related: 25
If there was 1 related text I'd do: Core Related Core
If there was 2 related texts I'd do: Core Related Related

However I didn't wait until the under to integrate them. In my related texts I would often mention themes/notions that were explored in the core texts just so the markers could see how my texts were related

I hope that helps :s
 
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^ thank you!!!
:) :) :)
that helped a lot!
although I'm still a bit unsure as to how to structure the body of the essay but that's fine
 

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Well basically for the structure of your body paragraphs (this is how I think I did mine):
Topic sentence - try to incorporate the the question and/or the rubric
Maybe a 1 sentence synopsis of the text/chapter or whatever (so the marker has a brief idea of what the text is about)
Your idea, quote, technique, relate back to topic sentence
Your idea, quote, technique, relate back to topic sentence
Your idea, quote, technique, relate back to topic sentence
Concluding sentence relating back to the question and topic sentence


Remember to keep referring back to the question! Otherwise it will look like a prewritten essay (whether it is or not)
 

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