Urgennt opinions on poetic analysis- Assessment 2moro =) (1 Viewer)

[LUHGMUFC18]

So my assessment is tomorrow, the 1st part is worth 10% their giving us unseen text, & their will be short answer questions, second part is worth 5% and we will have to write two poetic analysis of two core text poems are Bruce Dawe. Im choosing "enter without so much as knocking" & "Drifters". Can I have anyones opinion on the analysis & give me pointers to improve, thanx =) .

This is my poem:

Blink, blink. HOSPITAL. SILENCE.
Ten days old, carried in the front door in his
mother's arms, first thing he heard was
Bobby Dazzler on Channel 7:
Hello, hello hello all you lucky people and he
really was lucky because it didn't mean a thing
to him then...
A year or two to settle in and
get acquainted with the set-up; like every other
well-equipped smoothly-run household, his included
one economy-size Mum, one Anthony Squires-
Coolstream-Summerweight Dad, along with two other kids
straight off the Junior Department rack.

When Mom won the
Luck's-A-Fortch Tricky-Tune Quiz she took him shopping
in the good-as-new station-wagon (£ 495 dep. at Reno's).
Beep, beep. WALK. DON'T WALK. TURN
LEFT. NO PARKING. WAIT HERE. NO
SMOKING. KEEP CLEAR/OUT/OFF GRASS. NO
BREATHING EXCEPT BY ORDER. BEWARE OF
THIS. WATCH OUT FOR THAT. My God (beep)
the congestion here just gets (beep)
worse every day, now what the (beep beep) does
that idiot think he's doing (beep beep and BEEP).

However, what he enjoyed most of all was when they
went to the late show at the local drive-in, on a clear night
and he could see (beyond the fifty-foot screen where
giant faces forever snarled screamed or make
incomprehensible and monstrous love) a pure
unadulterated fringe of sky, littered with stars
no-one had got around to fixing up yet: he'd watch them
circling about in luminous groups like kids at the circus
who never go quite close enough to the elephant to get kicked.

Anyway, pretty soon he was old enough to be
realistic like every other godless
money-hungry back-stabbing miserable
so-and-so, and then it was goodbye stars and the soft
cry in the corner when no-one was looking because
I'm telling you straight, Jim, it's Number One every time
for this chicken, hit wherever you see a head and
kick whoever's down, well thanks for a lovely
evening Clare, it's good to get away from it all
once in a while, I mean it's a real battle all the way
and a man can't help but feel a little soiled, himself,
at times, you know what I mean?

Now take it easy
on those curves, Alice, for God's sake,
I've had enough for one night, with that Clare Jessup,
hey, ease up, will you, watch it --

Probity & Sons, Morticians,
did a really first-class job on his face
(everyone was very pleased) even adding a
healthy tan he'd never had, living, gave him back for keeps
the old automatic smile with nothing behind it,
winding the whole show up with a
nice ride out to the underground metropolis
permanent residentials, no parking tickets, no taximeters
ticking, no Bobby Dazzlers here, no down payments,
nobody grieving over halitosis
flat feet shrinking gums falling hair.

Six feet down nobody interested.

Blink, blink. CEMETERY. Silence.
Epigraph: Remember, man, that thou art dust, and unto dust thou shalt return.

My analysis:
The poem "enter without so much as knocking" is a cyclic poem written by Australian author Bruce Dawe. This poem takes us on a journey of life, through the all its beauty, material, chaos & hectic ends. The main themes used in this poem include, Physical Journey's, Conformity, Materialism, Superficiality, Chaos, & life . The author Bruce Dawe presented these themes throughout the poem using techniques such as repetition, Metaphors, Short sentences, coincise words, hyperbole, & descriptive imagery. The poem is a thrill, it paints you a picture, of how chaotic life can get, and how unknowingly life can end.

The poem takes us through a life journey, it starts of with the persona opening eyes at birth, then ending it six feet down.
Stanza 1, the poem starts at birth, where after 10 days of birth the child is taken home, and he hears his first noise, not one of his loving affectionate mother but of materialism. The voice of Bobby Dazzler echoed into the newborns ears, irony is used to mock how the baby is introduced to materialism at such a young age, yet he doesn't even know how it will affect him for the rest of his life.

In stanza two commercialism is used to describe the persona's family, describing his mother as being an economy size mum, a lightweight summer cool stream dad and two other children of the department rack. The use of commercialism used to describe a family, is showing how shallow society has come, and what they value most.

Stanza three gives us a preview of how hectic like will become, it uses descriptive imagery to paint a picture in our mind, of how chaotic life has become.Stanza four, is showing how the persona hasn't conformed to materialism, it uses a Metaphor & hyperbole to describe how the persona is appreciating life's natural beauty, yet materialism is right on his door step with a fifty foot screen screaming to him to show superficiality some love.

The poem continues, and shows how the persona eventually conforms to society & materialism and how he become the stereotypical male as beinga godless, money hungry backstabbing so & so. He's becoming a real man to society & theirs no stopping him.
Stanza 6 shows the lead up to his death, the persona was arguing with a female named Alice about his horrible night with Clare Jessup, Alice isn't going so easy on the road, & the curves in which she speeds can represent his life flashing past him. The persona eventually succumbs to his death via a car accident. His life is ended, his journey is over yet but the reality part of it is.

Stanza 7 describes the deceased as finally having something to smile about, yet its nothing that fake smile embodied on his face is the smile of no more down payments, no more Clare Jessup, no more Taximeters, no more Bobby Dazzler, no more chaotic lifestyle, here he six feet down from the Earth surface. Nobody cares, nobodies asking about his whereabouts & nobodies pressuring him into conforming to materialism.

The poem concludes with the way it began, the poem ends the cycle by at birth being silent and at death forever he be silent..



Thanxx guys . Im in the middle of writing an analysis of Drifter's & I would so totally appreciate the opinions, thanx muchh =)

 

[muzeikchun852]

thats wat we are doing in our exam..

and i cant really help u as my english is not brilliant myself.

 

[walsh2]

The poem follows one child in a typical nuclear family from birth through a rushed life, where he has little time for reflection, to his early death in an accident.

The poem opens with the birth of the main character and the first sound he hears is the television. It is as if he is born when the television is turned on. When he dies his death is like a television being turned off, leaving silence.

The impression is of everything being new and shiny, modern, full of activity and crowded, until death. It's only the stars behind the drive-in movie screen that have not been tidied up yet, that are not part of the circus.

 

[s2 SEductive]

awwww i remember learning about this poem by Bruce dawe in year 10 , but we realted it to consumerism

i'v still got the analysis in dot points awww

but ur analysis looks pweetyyy good.