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I used the dice. It was about a person obsessed with gambling, how about it gave him euphoric experience and that it was just another part of his life. Also, it was rather character based.
 

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I used the dice. It was about a person obsessed with gambling, how about it gave him euphoric experience and that it was just another part of his life. Also, it was rather character based.
Same.
Are you allowed to leave ur story on a cliffhanger?
 

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I chose the pocket watch picture. It was about a crazy grand dad saying it was filled powers. It was pretty crappy
 

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I used the watch which was a like a symbol of survival for a man that had crashed in the outback as it had his family on it. I also used the time on it 5:45 as the time he first looked at it and as the time he was rescued when he was about to die and given up hope.
 

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I wrote using the pen one about someone sitting in an exam hall and not knowing what to write, and just getting hell descriptive of their mind and the room and crap.
 

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I chose the grandfather watch and I just talked about time..

Time prior to the English SC and wondering how I'm going to do and the emotion I was experiencing and stufff.. Pretty cliche and weird! :L
 
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I chose the grandfather watch and I just talked about time..

Time prior to the English SC and wondering how I'm going to do and the emotion I was experiencing and stufff.. Pretty cliche and weird! :L
Haha same! Except mine was in the perspective of this old guy talking about how we seem to define our lives by time and suddenly we realise that we can break through the boundaries of time and get second chances, etc.
I probably screwed it up, but it said to write about an idea or moment, so meh.
 

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Mine was so bad .

i feel asleep and my brain shut down and i wrote about fighting against urself . lol
 
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i wrote about the dice.

a guy was a poker champ and tonight he was losing.
he was 30k in debt allready and needed this win.
He borrowed 250k from the casino for this game and needed a 7 to win.
he rolled a 2 and then i wote all this suspicion and it ended with a 4

he ended up losing and then get escorted by the massive security guards cause he was going crazy.

His wife left him and so the debt would go to her. his life insurance was worth 340k so if he died by a 3rd party his family would claim the insurance, to help pay off his debt.

So he found a bum payed him and gave him a broken beer bottle.

It ended with this "I need to do this, its for my family..."

cuz i finished with an elipses does that mean i will get marked down because i didn't actually finish the story??

I know it sounds shit here, but it was allot more detailed and what-not in the exam..
 

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i picked the key - i made it out to be like a guy in prison trying to escape when the "keyman" (original) comes to check on them and he knocks him out and frees the rest and they all escape but then at the end u learn they are at a boarding school and escaped to go to a girls school that had a disco on - but when they get there no one is there :p
 

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cool, i wrote about the pen and paper and had the idea protraying the students to be prisoners, all in dull uniforms, all known by numbers, and how everyone is gonna die but at the end it was a student loss for words (it was in first person), and has no idea what to write about. i guess i kinda wrote about my self in the exam, but i thank god i watched shawshank redemption last night because if i didnt i most would have came up with some corny story
 

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I wrote a mad story about a chick who had bulimia and went to the bathroom.
"as i stuck my fingers down my throat a whole new world begins to erupt" <-- direct quote from my story ;). She walks back to the classroom everyone is staring at her, she realises she has vomit on her shirt. Alot more detailed as you can imagine lol. It was suppose to be based on the key, which i mention twice and was used to open the toilet haha.

I wonder if the markers will think im sick twisted kid?
 

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I wrote a mad story about a chick who had bulimia and went to the bathroom.
"as i stuck my fingers down my throat a whole new world begins to erupt" <-- direct quote from my story ;). She walks back to the classroom everyone is staring at her, she realises she has vomit on her shirt. Alot more detailed as you can imagine lol. It was suppose to be based on the key, which i mention twice and was used to open the toilet haha.

I wonder if the markers will think im sick twisted kid?
I do
 

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haha yeah but my english teacher told me to right about the oppostie gender if possible to detach emotional links etc, so i did. I told him what i wrote and he said he wont be suprised if the markers talk to the school if its to bad hahahahaa hope they do that would be fun!
 

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Well i wrote about the pen.
It was a present from this girls dead dad, and it kept writing by itself. At first it wrote "SHE WONT COME HOME" while she was talking to her mum on the phone, she got annoyed and threw the paper out and tried again. She tried to write 'dear diary' but instead she wrote "Duck! Duck NOW!" and so she ducked and this rock smashed the window right where she was. THen she thought, it that was true then mum probably isnt going to come home. So she raced out got into her car and went to the gym where she thought her mum would be. She raced through the carpark and a pedestrian stepped out in front of her and she was going to fast.
She finds out the person she killed is her mum, and while hugging herself the pen writes on her arm "And now she is mine, thanks, Love dad"
 

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I wrote about the dice...
this "trouble minded" maths genius liked to gamble with himself, kinda like TwoFace from Batman, but instead he used dice.
I ended up using the first page to explain his motivation, then most of the second page to explain how I knew so much about him and eventually revealed in the last paragraph that I was his split personality

quite shit, I know.. =/
 

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