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i would like some help if anyone is willing to do that for me 
So, my half yearlies in next week and i have to write an english essay and the statement is 'change involves a choice that alters one's view of others and their world'. I haven't finished my intro, but I would like feedback please.
INTRO
Change is a fundamental need and critical component of one’s life as they grow and mature because it helps shapes one’s perception of things.It is powerfully influenced by the choices an individual makes.These choices may stem from one’s social and personal circumstances as a result,it can alter one’s views of others and their world because the underlying importance of this is how one acts in these situations defines who they are and perception of things. Moreover, change is clearly present within the book ‘Night’ by Elie Wiesel.This notion is further explored through the two poems “The Road Not Taken” by Robert Frost and (2nd poem) and also the short story ‘No Job For A Girl’ by .All of these texts reinforce the critical significance of choices that play a role in altering one’s view of others and their world.
BODY
Our lives are directed by the choices we make and in turn it give us great power to make changes.Life is filled with such essential choices, choices that define who we are. Depending on the situation an individual is in the choices they make can either be good or bad because of this, it can alter one’s views of others and their world.This is shown through the poem The Road Not Taken by Robert Frost in the lines ‘I took the one less travelled by, And that has made all the difference’.The use of first person justifies the fact that although the persona had to chose between two roads he took the road less travelled which sometimes is not the best choice.However, the emphasis is not only on what has been chosen but also on the reason for that choice as the persona wanted to travelled in the road that no one has taken because he does not want to necessarily follow the crowd but do more of what has never been done, what is new and different.This, in turn, indicates that by altering his path his views of others and world changed because the persona took this path over the more popular, secure one and with that,it has made a significant impact towards his life because it was worth it as he has no regrets due to the fact that the experience of that path is rewarding and satisfying.In addition, it is evident that poem communicates the idea of change as a form of choice as the extended metaphor in the poem, is used persistently because informs us how about human beings are confronted with and defined by the choices they make.The use of symbolism for the word ‘road’ represents that every road leads to a specific destination which depends entirely on the choice that are made as one makes a series of choices that leads them to their destination.In contrast to Night, Elie Wiesel also discuses the element of change throughout the lines “What are we going to do?” He was lost in thought.The choice was in our hands.For once.We could decide our fate for ourselves.To stay, both of us, in the infirmary, … I had made up my mind to accompany my father wherever he went … “Let’s be evacuted with the others,” I said. (pg 82).The technique of rhetorical question creates and adds emphasis to the anticipation of what their choice will be because it changes their lives.In addition, combined with inclusive language and first person it denotes that Elie and his father were hopeful because for once they got to make a choice for themselves without any influences.In the end, they went on the death march, this proved to be a bad choice because the outcome costed them to endure more suffering and challenges.It has impacted greatly on Elie because his father did not survive the Holocaust.Had Elie and his father stayed in the infirmary they would’ve been freed from the reign of the Nazis and his father would have survived the Holocaust. Therefore, it is evident both text explore that notion that choices impact on one’s life as a result their views of others and their world alters when change becomes prevalent/occurs.
So, my half yearlies in next week and i have to write an english essay and the statement is 'change involves a choice that alters one's view of others and their world'. I haven't finished my intro, but I would like feedback please.
INTRO
Change is a fundamental need and critical component of one’s life as they grow and mature because it helps shapes one’s perception of things.It is powerfully influenced by the choices an individual makes.These choices may stem from one’s social and personal circumstances as a result,it can alter one’s views of others and their world because the underlying importance of this is how one acts in these situations defines who they are and perception of things. Moreover, change is clearly present within the book ‘Night’ by Elie Wiesel.This notion is further explored through the two poems “The Road Not Taken” by Robert Frost and (2nd poem) and also the short story ‘No Job For A Girl’ by .All of these texts reinforce the critical significance of choices that play a role in altering one’s view of others and their world.
BODY
Our lives are directed by the choices we make and in turn it give us great power to make changes.Life is filled with such essential choices, choices that define who we are. Depending on the situation an individual is in the choices they make can either be good or bad because of this, it can alter one’s views of others and their world.This is shown through the poem The Road Not Taken by Robert Frost in the lines ‘I took the one less travelled by, And that has made all the difference’.The use of first person justifies the fact that although the persona had to chose between two roads he took the road less travelled which sometimes is not the best choice.However, the emphasis is not only on what has been chosen but also on the reason for that choice as the persona wanted to travelled in the road that no one has taken because he does not want to necessarily follow the crowd but do more of what has never been done, what is new and different.This, in turn, indicates that by altering his path his views of others and world changed because the persona took this path over the more popular, secure one and with that,it has made a significant impact towards his life because it was worth it as he has no regrets due to the fact that the experience of that path is rewarding and satisfying.In addition, it is evident that poem communicates the idea of change as a form of choice as the extended metaphor in the poem, is used persistently because informs us how about human beings are confronted with and defined by the choices they make.The use of symbolism for the word ‘road’ represents that every road leads to a specific destination which depends entirely on the choice that are made as one makes a series of choices that leads them to their destination.In contrast to Night, Elie Wiesel also discuses the element of change throughout the lines “What are we going to do?” He was lost in thought.The choice was in our hands.For once.We could decide our fate for ourselves.To stay, both of us, in the infirmary, … I had made up my mind to accompany my father wherever he went … “Let’s be evacuted with the others,” I said. (pg 82).The technique of rhetorical question creates and adds emphasis to the anticipation of what their choice will be because it changes their lives.In addition, combined with inclusive language and first person it denotes that Elie and his father were hopeful because for once they got to make a choice for themselves without any influences.In the end, they went on the death march, this proved to be a bad choice because the outcome costed them to endure more suffering and challenges.It has impacted greatly on Elie because his father did not survive the Holocaust.Had Elie and his father stayed in the infirmary they would’ve been freed from the reign of the Nazis and his father would have survived the Holocaust. Therefore, it is evident both text explore that notion that choices impact on one’s life as a result their views of others and their world alters when change becomes prevalent/occurs.
