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This story has a bit of a Harry Potter feel to it. Slightly more Anime though.
The beginning sounds a bit far-fetched when you first set out, but I urge you to continue reading.
It is currently still in production, hence incomplete. Just posting for feedback. Would lke to hear opinions, and even ideas for further chapters.
It is unedited as of yet, so there may be a few typos, etc. The grammar isn't perfect, but I get lazy.
Since it is easy to steal material off a forum, my copyright is listed on the bottom.
Here are the first few chapters.
Hope you enjoy the read:
Tell me if you want me to post what else I have.
All text in the quote boxes are hereby owned and copyrighted by the owner of the GoldEyes avatar and can only be used or reproduced with the owners permission.
The beginning sounds a bit far-fetched when you first set out, but I urge you to continue reading.
It is currently still in production, hence incomplete. Just posting for feedback. Would lke to hear opinions, and even ideas for further chapters.
It is unedited as of yet, so there may be a few typos, etc. The grammar isn't perfect, but I get lazy.
Since it is easy to steal material off a forum, my copyright is listed on the bottom.
Here are the first few chapters.
Hope you enjoy the read:
Here is the first few paragraphs of the next chapter:Guardian Angel.
Demons, Angels and various other creatures were flying around the room, this giant room made of stone and wood. There was a sort of strange fog or mist covering the floor of the room. Lee, cowering behind an upturned table managed to find his video camera in his pocket. He pulled it out and began filming.
Strangely, you couldn't see the creatures on the camera screen. You could only see the vibrant washes of colour coming from the projectiles the creatures were throwing at each other.
Suddenly; "Lee!?".
Lee jumped and hit his head on the tables leg. Nursing his head he looked around to see who or what could be calling his name now of all times.
"LEE!?"
The voice sounded soft, gentle, yet in a bit of a panic. Lee swung around to face the other way and saw what appeared to be a girl with pink hair standing with her back to him, looking around.
"LEEEE!?"
Lee yelled out "YEAH!?". The girl turned around. She looked at Lee and he caught a glimpse of her eyes. They were a rich, dark gold.
"LEE!" The girl screamed, this time more urgent. He couldn't take his eyes off her. He couldn't make out her face in the haze.
"LEEEEE!!".
Lee woke up, forgetting where he was.
"For the last time, Lee! Get UP! I am not driving you to school today!".
"Ah" Lee thought, "School!". Checking his clock, he got up and started rushing around, looking for his uniform. 7:38. Plenty of time. Finding it, he chucked it on as fast as he could and began the hunt for his bag.
Lee was tall in height, short black hair and a little on the fitter side. A cheeky look in his hazel eyes, he always seemed happy and light-hearted.
Oh how Lee hated the school uniform. And how he hated his Mum making him wear it correctly to the T. Grey pants and jacket, white collared shirt and a burgundy and gold striped tie. How original.
Lee raced down stairs, grabbed his lunch and made a break for the door. His Mum popped her head around the corner and asked "What about breakfast? Hey?"
"I'll buy something at the bakery on the way, 'mother dearest' " Lee replied with a grin on his face, flashing a ten dollar note.
"Okay then, Son".
Lee burst out of the door, just in time to see his friend, Jeremy, walking past the front gate of his house.
"JER!!!!!!!!!! You BASTARD!" Lee screamed as loud as he could. Jeremy jumped and looked around with a shocked look on his face. No sooner than he looked at Lee, did he fall onto the median strip. Lee had tackled Jeremy.
"Dude! Hello! What the hell!? Get off me!" yelled Jeremy. No sooner than when he heard this, Lee pounced up and offered his hand, with that sly grin on his face again.
" No way dude. I know how you work", said Jeremy with one eye squinting and the opposite eyebrow raised.
Jeremy Tilson was pretty slight of build, a little tall with straight blonde hair that stopped at his shoulders. His hair was so blonde, it appeared to be a matt white type of colour. Because of his hair's colour and style, he got alot of guff from students at school.
Lee not one to pass the opportunity;
"Get up, or your hair will get dirty."
"Oh noo! My hair!... Heh... You need new material."
Jeremy got up to discover that his video camera had fallen out of his bag. Picking it up, he murmured "better not be broken" and began fiddling around with it.
The camera reminded Lee of something. But what?
"My dream!" Lee said.
Jeremy looked at him with that look that everyones best friend gives them. You know that look. The "is everything okay with you, or have you finally lost the plot?" look.
Lee realized that he said that out loud, and that Jeremy was looking at him... And that a group of girls had just walked past, heard him and had begun giggling.
He decided that he would have to tell Jeremy about his dream now.
Lee started walking and called Jeremy to walk with him. Jeremy, finding that his camera was in good shape ran up beside him and gave him the look again.
Lee, sensing this, simply said "I'll tell you on the way". Jeremy just gave him the look even more intensely.
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Lee and Jeremy walked up the steps into the bakery.
"So your telling me that in this dream, a girl with pink hair and gold eyes was calling your name while angels, demons and various other mystical creatures fought each other over head?"
Lee, realizing how far-fetched this sounded reluctantly replied; "Yee-ah...".
"Dude..." said Jeremy, "You really have lost it, haven't you?"
"I'm serious!" Said Lee while ordering a sausage roll and a chocolate milk. "That's what happened."
"I've always thought you were a bit odd, Lee. No wonder the school councilor likes you so much!" said Jeremy jokingly.
"Hey Jeremy!"
"Yeah?"
Lee hit Jeremy on the top of the head with his chocolate milk.
"Shut up."
Jeremy threw a punch at Lee's stomach.
"You bastard!"
As the two started to wrestle infront of the service desk, Lee's sausage roll was delivered to him.
"Stop! Food!" Said Lee.
The girl on the other side of the counter took the money and gave Lee his sausage roll and receipt while giving the two a soft, judging smile. She was pretty, but Lee took no notice and politely smiled back.
Turning back to speak to Jeremy, Lee noticed that there was an extra piece of paper behind the receipt. The two make their way to a seating booth. Sitting down, Lee looked back at the counter to have a look at the girl who served him. She wasn't there. There was just a guy running the counter. She must have gone out back.
"Where'd that girl go, Jer?"
"How should I know? I was too busy defending myself!" said Jeremy.
Lee had that feeling you get when you have Deja Vu.
"Are you sure you're okay, Lee?" asked Jeremy.
"Yeah, man. I'm fine" replied Lee, remembering the piece of paper.
"I swear the girl who served me..."
"The girl who doesn't exist?" teased Jeremy. Lee ignored this.
"The girl who served me gave me this piece of paper".
"Well open it!" said Jeremy. He tested his luck; "I think she liiiikes yooou...".
"Like that year seven chick likes you?".
"Shut up, dude! I told you it's not true!" defended Jeremy.
"I see the way she looks at you".
"Just open it." ordered Jeremy.
Lee opened the piece of paper and spread it on the bench top. The piece of paper had what appeared to be a pentagram with a phrase of latin written over the top of it. There was also the words: "I'm looking", written in very neat handwriting under the pentagram.
"What the hell?" said Lee.
"Thats... Uh... Strange." said Jeremy.
"You're telling me." said Lee, a little spooked.
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The rest of the day went past like any other regular school day. After the final school bell, Lee met up with Jeremy again at the bottom gates.
"Any more notes?" Jeremy asked in an odd tone.
"Ha... No actually" said Lee. "It was probably just that girl having some fun anyway".
"We've gotta go past the bakery. Wanna see if she's there?" asked Jeremy.
"Okay. We still going into the city?"
"Yeah. We'll go after we finish at the bakery".
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The two walked into the bakery again, looked behind the counter and couldn't see a girl, just the same guy as before. Lee decided to ask the guy if the girl was in.
"Can I help you?"
"Yeah... Is that girl who was working the counter this morning in at the moment?" asked Lee.
Lee got a strange look from the guy.
"What?".
"There are no girls currently employed here...".
Lee turned white.
"Are you sure?"
"Yeah. There aren't even any listed on the roster..."
Lee went even more white.
"You okay? You look like you just saw a ghost." asked the guy.
"I think I might have..." replied Lee. "Thanks".
Lee walked back to the entrance where Jeremy was standing.
"Woah! What happened? You look like you just saw a ghost."
"I know." said Lee. "The guy behind the counter said that too".
"So... What happened?" asked Jeremy.
"Well... That guy said that there are no girls working at the bakery".
"What?" asked Jeremy.
"Yeah. I know. None even on the roster".
Jeremy turned white. Lee shook it all off.
"Haha... Now you look like you saw a ghost!" said Lee. "Lets get to the train station. We'll miss the train if we don't go soon."
The two headed off in silence towards Lee's place. Their plan was to dump their stuff at Lee's, get changed and head off to the station.
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Lee and Jeremy walked out of an arcade when Lee saw a girl with pink hair out of the corner of his eye. He turned so suddenly that Jeremy jumped.
"Wah! What?" said Jeremy.
"Nothing... I thought I saw something". The pink hair he thought he saw was just a pink hoodie.
"Now you're seeing things? Maybe I should call the men in the white coats." heckled Jeremy.
"What?" Asked Lee.
"You know... The guys from the mental hospital... They wear white coats..."
Lee gave Jeremy a blank look. "Eh?".
"Never mind! Hey! Let's go and see if we can find out what that note means." suggested Jeremy.
"Uh... Okay".
They headed into a nearby cafe where a bunch of kids from their school were gathered and sat down at a table. Lee pulled out the note and placed it on the table.
"Okay, so... This looks like one of those pentagram things." said Jeremy.
"What? Like on those weegie board things?" asked Lee.
"Yeah. Like that. And this latin... How are we going to translate that? I may know someone..."
At that moment, Lee froze, looking out the window.
"And 'I'm looking'... What is that... Dude... What?".
"I could swear I just saw that girl." said Lee quietly.
"The girl from the bakery?"
"Yeah. The girl form the bakery".
"Seriously? Let's go then!" said Jeremy, enthusiastically.
"But..."
"But what? Lets. Go. Now." said Jeremy, practically pushing Lee off his chair.
The two rushed out of the cafe, Lee reluctantly, and headed the way that Lee thought the girl was walking. They headed towards the escalator. Not more than ten steps away from the top of the escalator, they spotted a girl in a brown overcoat with a hood that almost looked like a robe. She looked up at them.
"That's her!"
The moment Lee said that, the girl turned back and walked faster, into a crowd of people. The two guys came racing down the escalator, through the group of people and out the other side to find a wall. They followed the wall and found it lead to a cafe, and the other way to a sports shop.
"Where'd she go?" asked Jeremy.
"I have no idea." said Lee.
They went back to the group of people.
"Did you see a girl in an overcoat walk though here?" asked Jeremy.
"No" came the answer.
Lee and Jeremy looked at each other, not believing that these people had not just seen her walk through them.
"You sure? She came right through here. Walked through the middle of you". Lee asked.
"Yeah, I'm sure." replied one of the guys. "I think I would have seen a girl in an overcoat walk right infront of me."
Sensing the groups annoyance, they decided to leave. They were heading back towards the escalator when Jeremy said;
"This day has been strange. None of this makes sense!"
"I know" replied Lee. "It's even stranger for me cause I think the girl is targeting me somehow".
"What?"
"I know. But she gave me the note, and I have a feeling that "I'm looking" somehow means she's looking for me..."
"But she's found you, hasn't she? She's seen you twice", said Jeremy.
"Yeah... That's what I don't get" said Lee, with a small overtone of uncertainty in his voice.
Hope you enjoyed it!Lee was running. He didn't know where to. He was running through a forest on an early morning. The sun had just come up, so there was an orange and red tinge to the sky. Mist hung low around the trunks of the surrounding trees.
Lee kept running even though he had no idea where he was going.
He saw something in the horizon. A figure. He decided to slow down. He slowly walked towards the figure, trying to make as little noise as possible.
As he got closer, he noticed that the figure was wearing a robe. The kind of robe that the old monks wear in TV shows.
SNAP!
Lee stood on a stick. The figure remained unmoved.
"I've been looking...". The voice was distorted and low.
The figure slowly turned to face him. All Lee could see was the figures chin under the robes hood.
"For you.".....
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